I am a Year 7 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 10 and my teacher is Peta. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Ka rawe, great working developing a scary mood Emora. I love your simile of the lights on the ceiling being like staring eyes. What did you think of the kiwi at the zoo?
Kia ora Emora, it's Olivia from Ahipra school. I really liked this short story that you did, it's very interesting and it sounds like something I would do if I was in a dark scary room. Keep up the good work! Your friend Olivia.
Hi Emora I really like your Slam the door writing. Maybe next time you could do a little more work because it is so amazing. Keep up the good work. From Lacey.
Hi Emora, I really enjoyed reading your story and how much detail there is in your story.I also liked how you made the story short but super fun to read. Maybe next time you could write a blurb saying what the task was. Kyvana from at Ahipara School.
Ka rawe, great working developing a scary mood Emora. I love your simile of the lights on the ceiling being like staring eyes. What did you think of the kiwi at the zoo?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Emora, it's Olivia from Ahipra school. I really liked this short story that you did, it's very interesting and it sounds like something I would do if I was in a dark scary room. Keep up the good work! Your friend Olivia.
ReplyDeleteHi Emora I really like your Slam the door writing. Maybe next time you could do a little more work because it is so amazing. Keep up the good work. From Lacey.
ReplyDeleteHi Emora, Cyris here. I really like reading and writing it was really descriptive and cool to read. Maybe add more text. Great work.
ReplyDeleteHi Emora,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story and how much detail there is in your story.I also liked how you made the story short but super fun to read. Maybe next time you could write a blurb saying what the task was. Kyvana from at Ahipara School.